My first lettering attempt

[MikeV]

I'm learning to letter, so I'd appreciate any tips, critique and advice that could help me improve my skills. I got this page and script for the lettering activity archive over on DW. Two images posted below.

This is my first attempt -


After some feedback, I went back and reworked the page, producing this -

[mashfreak]

Looks good. I think it would look better with less space between each line, but that's just me. Great work!